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Basic Script Reading includes an analytical read of a feature-length film 
script.  The writer will receive 5-6 pages of typed notes.  The script 
will be returned with additional handwritten notes indicating where changes 
in the script might be made.  It also includes a one-hour follow-up phone 
consultation.

The typed-notes will be divided into two main parts:  Story and Rendering.

Story includes premise, theme, character, structure, plot, and character arcs.
Rendering includes dialog and cinematic storytelling.

Advanced Script Reading provides both an in-depth analysis of 
1)	fundamental story requirements 
2)	cinematic rendering.  

It also includes concrete creative suggestions in both
1)	story and 
2)	cinematic rendering. 

The writer will receive a map of their plot, character progressions, 
and thematic progression.  A character grid will also be mocked up. 
The writer will receive approximately 10 pages of analysis, and 10 
pages of creative suggestions.

Heres the breakdown focusing on specific questions that will be addressed: 

Part 1-Story
Premise, Theme, Structure, Plot and Character are analyzed. Special 
attention is made to progressions and the inter-relationship of theme, 
plot and character. Heres a list of what will be covered:

1.	Premise: Does the story have legs?  Is it strong and/or 
original enough to carry a 2-hour movie? How can the premise be 
tweaked to give the story more energy?

2.	Theme: Is it externalized in the script? Is there a thematic 
progression? How can the theme be better externalized and parceled out 
dramatically. 

3.	Structure: Does the plot fit onto a strong enough structure? 
Is there a way that the plot can be better structured? What needs 
to be added or subtracted to give the script a solid structural 
foundation? 

4.   Plot: Is the plot original? How useful are the plotting details 
with respect to theme? What to cut and what to pump up will be 
suggested. Does the plot create a strong enough dramatic ride. 
Does it transport us emotionally? Suggestions will be made on how 
to use the plot to better externalize theme and character 
progressions. There will also be a discussion on how to keep 
the plot fresh and unpredictable.

5. Character Dynamics: 
How useful are the main characters with respect to theme? How 
purposefully are the sidekicks used? Is there enough natural 
tension? Are the character problems sufficiently original and 
interesting to justify a two-hour movie? 

Part 2-Rendering

This will include concrete suggestions, via scene analysis, 
on how to render the story  more cinematically. Many of the 
problems raised in the analysis as described above will be 
practically addressed here. 

Suggestions will include an evaluation of how to turn dialog 
driven scenes into show- not-tell scenes.  They will include 
specific ideas on how to exploit editing, motion, lighting, 
props, wardrobe, repetition, action, framing and so to make 
the story feel like it could be a movie. 

Each script will have different needs and problems.  The 
analysis and suggestions will focus on those areas. 



Reasonable fees. Credit cards accepted.

Please call to discuss how I can help you with your script.